The story continues, taking up where Mission Creep – The Dance left off:
“No rush. As I said, no one’s watching out for me at my modest room.”
This was getting better by the moment. “It’ll take a little longer, but we can avoid the crush by heading this way to my car.”
“You’re such a considerate gentleman.”
The side route he led her through still contained too many prying eyes for him to get closer to this gem. Played right this could only heighten the desire she’s sending his way. To keep up appearances, he quizzed her on basic aspects of Stellar Dynamics.
She faultered in her rudimentary answer to his last question when they approached the sportiest car on the lot. He’d paid a lot of money to elicit that response from the ladies. And from the men who could only be jealous of his prowess for that matter. Bright red. Low slung. Every line said speed. And money. And comfort. The average person could never tell this machine from an actual super-car.
His remote caused the passenger door to rise as he led her around the sleek nose. “What do you think of my little rocket?”
She looked at him. “This is really yours?”
“Every last gram of luxury power. Take a look at where you’ll be sitting.”
The body molded seat sat so low she’d be more comfortable, and more enticing, leaning back the way he had it preset. As the driver he didn’t have quite as much freedom but plenty of time behind the wheel had helped him get even that just right. His one regret, the centre consule made cuddling a challenge.
“I get to ride in there?”
“You certainly do.” A little gallentry always did the trick at this moment. “Give me your hand and I’ll help you in.”
“Come now, how often do you get a chance to try out a ride like this?”
She looked from him to the car. “I’ve never even been this close to such a car before.”
“And you’re about to get closer. Please, climb in.”
She accepted his hand and slid in with a litheness that promised so much more. He lowered the door while she explored the comforts within and hurried around to take his seat.
I envision completing this story in 2 to 3 more segments. This raises the question: Do I continue posting them here before bringing them together in a polished final work or hold them back until it’s done? The comments below is your one and only chance to have a say in my decision.
#1 by debbiejinks on 27/06/2017 - 10:52
I think you should hold them back to keep your reader’s interest. It’ll flow more that way too. Segments sometimes get too bitty especially if they are quite short. When I read your story it feels as though I want to know a bit more before you finish that segment.